This moment, so fresh--
crisp;
serene and peaceful
Wanting this moment to last,
to last forever,
to never end,
never change
Slight breezes blow,
cool and soft --
but not changing the way the sun warms our skin from the cloudless blue sky
Hand stretched out to run my fingers through the tall grass --
soft brown --
reaching up to touch the edge of the sky
Long stems waving in the wind --
sending a friendly greeting to me;
the breeze sending a hello of its own,
weaving around me, through me
As we walk,
I look around me, seeing the trees on the other side of this sea --
pale browns and tans --
barren against the blue of the sky
Reminding me
of how,
as new things say hello,
others say goodbye
I look all around me --
really look at all that is surrounding me --
and can't help feeling the corners of my mouth pull upwards
For when I leave,
and return home,
and fall asleep tonight,
I will wake up
the calling that pulled me to this place,
this place of peace and serenity;
the promise of happiness,
joy,
will still be.
When I read this piece, in my head I hear Mr. Johnson reading it, which is kind of weird but I guess I just see them as something Mr. Johnson would write. Thats a compliment. This is almost poetic and this writing is just flat out beautiful.
ReplyDeleteI am so jealous! your such a mature writer and your voice is beautiful, when you wrote how u smiled, i did too, which sounds corny i know, but good job!
ReplyDeleteThis is lovely. A sense of peaceful calm, and real contentment washed over me while reading the selection. Thank you.
ReplyDeleteThat was really good! Your voice was awesome and I could get a really good idea of the setting. Awesome job!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading that. I liked the ending, it sounded really hopeful. I enjoyed it a lot!
ReplyDeleteYou painted a beautiful and serene picture in my head, that was a very fun piece to read
ReplyDeleteI really like your poem. It created a peacful vision in my mind. Also it flowed very well. Great job
ReplyDeleteAutumn, great poem. As most people who commented on this said, it is very peaceful. It brings back to me so many memories from last year :). Thank you Autumn! And Morgan Patt, I totally understand what you are saying. Me too. It really does seem like something Mr. Johnson would read or write. Great job Autumn you have a really good skill of writing poetry.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed this. It's a really beautiful piece. It gave me a clear picture of what you were describing, and your voice was perfect. Good job Autumn!
ReplyDeleteThis is a really cool peaceful poem! This sounds like a good moment. You used good repetition and I like how the poem flowed. Good job!
ReplyDeleteHey can you like please fail at a poetry like once!? Because you are really too good at it. (: Love this poem and the picture is really pretty.
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