Author's note: This is the mimic poem that I did imitating William Blake. In this poem, he uses an AABB rhyming pattern and I also tried to incorporate this within the poem. Blake was also a man that was a little out there, and he would change the spellings of words, well, just to change them, so I also used some of that aspect of him when writing this. He has a writing style that makes the reader think that the poem is a silly, childish poem, but in reality the topic of the poem is more serious. I tried to reflect that within the poem that I wrote, but I'm not sure exactly how it played out, so leave comments of what you think please! The italics is his, and then mine follows after.
Tyger, Tyger, burning bright
Tyger, Tyger, burning bright
In the forests of the night
What immortal hand or eye?
Could frame thy fearful symmetry?
In what distant deeps or skies
Burnt the fire of thine eyes?
On what wings dare he aspire?
What the hand dare seize the fire?
And what shoulder and what art
Could twist the sinews of they heart?
And when thy heart began to beat,
What dread hand and what dread feet?
What the hammer? what the chain?
In what furnace was thy brain?
What the anvil? what dread grasp?
Dare its deadly terrors clasp?
When the stars threw down their spears,
And water'd heaven with their tears,
Did He smile His work to see?
Did He who made the lamb make thee?
Tyger, Tyger, burning bright
In the forests of the night
What immortal hand or eye?
Could frame thy fearful symmetry?
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Magick, Magick, sparking surprise
Magick, Magick, sparking surprise
In the beauty of one's eyes
What mysterious creature or genie?
Released upon us your mysticality?
With what gloved hands of white
Brought the sound of pure delight?
And what things bring such desire?
What the stage dare present your conspire?
For what audience and what show
Did first cheer your face aglow?
And when your tricks began to fail,
Who was there to watch you wail?
Where's the circus? Where's the audition?
In what arena did you first listen?
What the spotlight? What strong spirit?
Did you first happen to solicit?
When the spotlight shone on the stage,
And light'd your face; a well lit page,
Did the Audience smile, their money well spent?
Did they clap with no resent?
Magick, Magick, sparking surprise
In the beauty of one's eyes
What mysterious creature or genie?
Released upon us your mysticality?
Autumn-- you have great vocabulary and this poem was really well written. I really like that you used Blake's style but choose a completely different topic than him. It still has that same effect though, both poems leave you with unanswered questions which makes it even more interesting. Overall, this piece was very successful and you did a great job!
ReplyDeleteWow, Autumn, this is really nice. Your vocabulary is amazing and the style was well copied, thought you made it your own. Great job.
ReplyDeleteThe author's note really helped in understanding what you wanted to accomplish, which I think you did a really good job of. I liked your theme of it, it was different and really cool. Also you did a good job imitating the original poem.
ReplyDeleteI thought that you emulated this poem really well. The original poem seems difficult to emulate but you did a very good job at doing that. Your vocabulary was also very good and you sounded very sophisticated. Good job!
ReplyDeleteI liked how you matched Blake's spelling patterns. It made the poem have an authentic feel. Good job.
ReplyDeleteAutumn, this was such a cool poem. As Alyssa said, your vocabulary was really good and it added to the effect of the poem. You did a really good job emulating your poet. Nice job!
ReplyDeleteGreat vocabulary and rhyming. In sometimes rhyming can give a fake feeling to the poem this really added to it. I really liked how you changed some of the spellings just like Blake did. Fantastic poem.
ReplyDeleteThis was great. It really showed how good of a vocabulary you had. I think you did a very good job of making it sound kind of silly and fun but actually being more serious. I really liked the way you spelled magic too. Over all I think you did a fantastic job.
ReplyDeleteThat is a really cool poem that you wrote and you did a great job emulating Blake. I like the topic that you used for your poem and the way that you kind of told a story in your writing.
ReplyDeleteThis was such a great poem! The topic was really cool, and I think that the imitation was spot on. I liked the way it flowed, and your vocabulary was great too. Awesome job!
ReplyDeleteAs you've heard before and will hear again this is a really, really well written poem. Not only does it emulate your poet, but it adds an original flair to it. It takes a lot of time and effort to rhyme a poem especially with this complex vocabulary. Good job Autumn.
ReplyDeleteI like how you imitate Blake so well. I don't think closed form fits your style and personality, so I think it may have been a particular challenge, but you did really well. I enjoyed reading it very much.
ReplyDeleteI love this poem Autumn. It has such a nice flow to it. I agree with Mr. J in the sense that I don't really think of you as being a closed format person, but you couldn't tell that at all reading this. I especially loved how you changed the spelling just like Blake did. That added so much personality. Way to go!
ReplyDeleteI love all of your writing Autumn. Just the feeling that I get after reading it almost gives me like a sense of "wow, that girl is an amazing writer" :) haha but anyways, I don't really have anything to say here because I totally agree with everyone else. Sometimes rhyming can sound childish and you somewhat mentioned that in the author's note, but the way that you incorporated it was in a mature, high school level way. Nice job:)
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